Bible poem...?

i just wrote this poem about Esther from the Bible. what do you think about it?:

God had a purpose,

For making her queen.

Though the reason

Was hard to be seen.

Until one day,

When Hamond the Bad,

Caused trouble and strief

And her people were sad.

Knowing she's queen

Her cousin knew,

Their trouble with Hamond

Would soon be through.

But, she knew if she went

To her husband , the King

He might disaprove

And death he would bring.

She saved her family

And her people the Jews,

And with her great triumph

Came lots of good news!

i hope you liked it. its rough but i'll eventuallly revise it. God Bless!

Bible poem...?norton

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perfect, i love it. and so original

i like the way it rhymed and mixed the bible story so kids could understand it, and learn from it

and along with that, the parents dont have to worry about trying to get their kids to learn about the bible without finding it repulsive by being boring

god bless
how cute
It's the first really nice (and actually pretty accurate) thing I've seen a Christian write or say about our Torah/Tanach in quite a while. You are a Christian, right? I don't want to just assume, but I'm assuming you are.

Very sweet, thank you.
I could see this in a children's Bible. It's so sweet and easy to understand.
Good job!

But a quick question...I don't know who ''she or the queen'' is please tell me. Thanks (Totally serious not kidding!)

God bless!